Lady Sydney

I liked it! My only comment is that I felt this line ruined your rhythm: Frustrated, I strike the mold, it breaks. Maybe try... Frustrated, I strike the mold, and ...

I thought it was ok. Not the best, but still pretty good. The first thing that I want to point out as that you need to change all of your ...

I loved this. :D The only comment I have is that if you are comparing rainbows to prisoners, it would have a better effect if the poem was more-so about ...

As mentioned before, you need to work on this. A lot. I didn't feel what you were trying to pull across to your readers, which means you may want to ...

Aww, that was really sweet. My favorite stanza was: When she is sad I share her pain When she is mad I run Haha! Cute. ^_^ Agreeing with Arieda, though, ...

Oooh, very very nice! There wasn't much description in this, but there was enough to make me think. I like how you write; your poems aren't flat-out-tell-all, but they aren't ...

Ohhh! Haha! Cute. ^_^ I would have never gotten that, had you not put in that little Note. Even without the correct punctuation, it was actually quite entertaining. Everyone's all ...

I liked this, MDdd. It has a nice, easy rhythm that flows smoothly. As for its purpose, I'm going to take a wild guess on that. Is it about... how ...

Oook... I see where you're coming from. Nice content. But, as Matt said, it lacks individuality, thus it doesn't exactly "WOW" your readers. I personally wasn't too fond of the ...

Nice flow and rhythm with this, but I don't get it. :? lol I don't think that it was your lack of skill that has me confused, it's just me ...

Wow. :shock: Quite powerful. I loved it! The way your words flowed help the reader get the idea and your last line wrapped it up nicely. There are a lot ...

I liked this, but I'm a little confused about the line that said: ...make sky look pink At first, I thought you forgot the "the" between "make" and "sky", but ...

I really liked this one! ^_^ Agreeing with CK Lynn, though, your ending was a bit too abrupt to get whatever emotion you were trying to get across to us. ...

Agreeing completely with MadHatter, this could use a lot of work. I personally wasn't too fond of your rhyming, simply because it seemed a little unbalanaced. As for your rhythm/beat, ...

Hmm... I thought this was good, though it could be better. This actually seemed more Narrative than Dramatic. I just thought it told more of a story, rather than expressing ...